Making it all fit!

I was scanning through the cable channels Saturday morning looking for a something good to watch. After reading the description of The Crush, I decided to give the movie a shot. The movie was described as a suspense (my kind of genre!) about a college student who had sex with a woman. The woman then became obsessive. I started watching the movie and things that didn't make sense started jumping out at me.

If you are an author you know what I'm about to talk about. If you are a reader only, you might find it interesting to know about this part of the writing process. When we are writing a book we have to make sure that the actions fit well with the plot. Everything has to run smoothly together or we get our edits back with comments like "Why is she doing this? It makes no sense at all," or that the details don't fit with the plot, or that something similar. Our books are like puzzles, every single piece must fit perfectly or the picture is not complete.

So back to the movie. One of the key points is that the college student is house-sitting for a rich stranger. As the owner of the house leaves, he mentions his niece stopping by occasionally for a swim. I had an issue with this. Why would the owner have a stranger live in the house while his niece (an adult) lives close by and can do it? Did not make sense to me. I kept watching. So the college student met the "niece" who happens to be there all the time! He has sex with the niece even though he has a girlfriend and the niece becomes obsessive over the college student. At one point she wraps her hands around his neck and makes him tell her that he loves her. The college student becomes so scared of this chick that he can't sleep at night. It effects his schooling and the sport he plays. So why doesn't he leave? I don't know and that fact alone bothered me. The owner calls the college student who mentions that he had met the owner's niece. Guess what? The owner told him that meeting his niece wasn't possible since his niece had taken a trip out of town. Did the college student leave yet? Heck no. I would have packed up my crap and hit the road. He later finds out that she is a ghost and is in love with the college student.

There wasn't any ghost stuff through 3/4 of the movie. There wasn't any hint of the movie turning paranormal or even close. I kept watching though just to see how it ended. The ghost woman transformed from being a beautiful woman to an evil entity which the sudden change scared the crap out of me. I couldn't look at her half the time. Even after the change, the actions didn't make sense. She told the college student (now locked in the house so he couldn't leave) that she was the one who would end all of this stuff but then she went into the water with slit wrists. Made no sense. Then she was back in the bedroom telling him he needed to die so he could be with her forever. She did manage to kill him as his girlfriend (who had been ignoring him all through the movie) suddenly appears to save him.

I love watching movies that reminds me of the "right way" to write a story. By showing me everything wrong, reinforced the desire to make everything fit smoothly together. I don't want a single reader to ask why the heck I threw another puzzle's piece in the center of the one the reader is enjoying. Thanks, crappy movie writers, for reminding me of this!

Happy Wednesday!

Wendy Ely

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